respose to naritive

After doing the checklist for your partner, answer the follow in this format:

Name of Reviewed Individual: Amy Mo

1. What are the strengths of your partner’s essay? Why?
      did a good just of sticking to the story and not going off..
2. What areas could use improvements? In other words, what suggestions can you give
your partner that will help his/her paper improve?
             use more dicripion/ detail
3. What is your favorite literary device used in your partner’s essay?
          i liked the part about the chubby cheeks!
4. What is the part of the paper that stands out as the most "catchy" or important?
             fattt cheakss :p
       

Where I'm From

Where I'm From

Katie Allison

 

I am from avoided laundry piles, dark, white and color

I am from big rooms flooded with sunlight and small ovens pouring with smoke

I from where microwaves are the safer choice

I'm from dear and there cotton white tails,

From acres of rolling green

I'm from a luminescent Christmas tree

Am from roaring laughter boisterous voices

From Kemper and Liz, Allison and Baldwin

I am from hard work, suits and salesmen that sell ice to eskimos

From never giving up, chlorine and Sharpee

 I'm from never ending Sunday school and the warm glazed Krispy Cream taunted and awaited me in the gym.

I’m from royal throws, red coats and living history

I am from Mount Carmel and their angels

I am from warm sun, and leaves that magically change colors and snow waist high

 From country fields and the strong winds that bring the dust from everywhere.

Look back through my narrative...

-involves readers in the story.

I think it involves the reader because in the intro I am describing where I am and what I am thinking but I don’t just say right off the back that I am in the doctors office waiting on test results.

-relates events in sequence.

I don’t jump around too much and I’m not all over the place so that’s good.

-includes detailed observations of people, places, and events.

I think I could add more descriptive detail when describing my surrounding through out the story.

-presents important changes, contrasts, or conflicts and creates tension.

I think I do a good job of setting the mood and describing what I’m feeling throughout the story.

- is told from a point of view--usually the author's point of view.

Defiantly told from my point of view

-focuses on connection between past events, people, or places and the present.

Yup

-makes a point, communicates a main idea or dominant impression.

Yup

n  I think the biggest thing that I have to fix is that it is all pretty much in past tense so I have to basically rewrite it and add present tense and dialog.  

Helen Keller response questions

Answer the following:

1. What did you think of this narrative?

           I think she has an amazing story, i could never imagine going through what she went through.

2. What was most interesting or engaging about it?

           I think it was really cool how she had such a close her relationship her tuter and how it started out really bad between them and they grew so close.

3. What surprised you?

           Even though she was deaf and blind but was still able to learn to communicate. 

4. Did this change your outlook on Helen Keller at all? Why or why not?

           Not really because i have read books about her and seen a movie about her life.

5. Copy and paste three examples of vivid detail and imagery that helped enhance the story

         1)Have you ever been at sea in a dense fog, when it seemed as if a tangible white darkness shut you in, and the great ship, tense and anxious, groped her way toward the shore with plummet and sounding-line, and you waited with beating heart for something to happen?

         2) When I finally succeeded in making the letters correctly I was flushed with childish pleasure and pride.      

         3) -words that were to make the world blossom for me, "like Aaron's rod, with flowers.

6. How can a narrative be more engaging than something like a biography? Why is it important to get someone's personal perspective?

          A personal narrative gives you not only the point of view straight from the subject but a personal narrative allows you to know what they're thinking and feeling.

7. Make a bulleted lists of some things you could write a narrative about,

       - When I got mono in 8th grade

       - My time in China and the different things that I had to deal with (Barb the group leader)

       - My 1st recruiting trip

       - Feeling like the outsider on the swim team my junior year

1st Day-Survey

1.)  I like english classes for the most part..
          I hate being forced to read bad/boring books though.

2.)  I'd enjoy...
         Poetry
         Made up short stories
         Lists
         Jokes

3.)  Fiction
       Poetry
       Short Stories
       Autobiographies
       Magazines

4.)  Extended Reaction response papers
       Dialog

5.)  B

6.)  I like bounceing ideas off each other, I think class discussion
      is a good way to get you really thinking about something you just
      read or worte.

7.)  I wouldnt say that I lead the discussion, but I would say that I
      contribute a lot to it.

8.)  I am a captian on the swim team, and I play water polo with the OSU
       club team and St. Charles Prep Team a few times a week durring the
      off season for water polo.

9.)  I went to Canton for a Swim Meet with the high school team. We left
    Friday and went to Fazolis for dinner in Canton, at the restrant i ran into one
    of my friends thats in the Millitary. Soo that was exciting. We stayed the night
    in the hotel woke up early went to the meet stayed at the pool pretty much
   all day got back to Worthington around 11:30pm. Went for a run Sunday morning
  and then made pancakes and then basicly chilled and wawtched movies all day.
  Monday my car battery died so I had to get a new one. (thankyou AAA). Monday
  night I went to visit a friend on campus and we got ice cream... It was yummy!

10.)  I am ADHD and I have Dyslexia and I am a really slow typer.

11.)  None